Liar,Liar #2

Collab with Burning Demon

Liar,Liar #2

I Looked into you eyes

jaded emerald streaming envy 

The lies I told to you,

the smile you had fallen for 

beneath my eyes so blue,

I constrict your dreams 

scale down your view, 

falling for a love 

wasn’t there to ever pursue,

A single touch can tempt you

bring you to my embrace,

lying to you constantly 

false love you can’t replace,

wish death upon me 

mutual feelings we do share,

the difference between you and I 

I don’t really care,

I never really loved you

I showed my burning star,

my phoenix you wish to be

but your freedom won’t get you far,

you will come crawling back 

your pray to this snakes love,

I’m water to this burning demon 

your angel sent from above,

Again we star in this masquerade 

promises I wont keep, 

fallen again into blacks trap 

the question is how deep?

Author's Note

Read burning demons "Liar,Liar"
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/BurningDemon/683470/
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Reviews

[Color of the Iris]

This was a great follow up to the awesome first "Liar, Liar" both of these pieces were so great that by the first word is accepted through the wall of your mental understanding you are drawn into the environment that the poem displays. Sights, colors, sounds, and emotions become yours and you understand. Now, the final matter would be to decide which one was best... (drum roll) I think the second was best, but the first came only a hair away from taking the sequel's spot. Great job, I loved this one a lot! 100/100!

~ Iris ~

[trainwreck]

I love this follow up. Its even better than the first, which is as sequels should be.

[Sherbs Dreaming Tree Of..]

I do enjoy but not as good as the original

[A Risen Heroine.]

The collab was really great as one!
I like this piece!
I wish I could say something more... I just don't know what to say...
Well all in all this is a really good piece!
Great job and thanks for sharing.

~A Fallen Heroine~

[Apathy To Empathy]

I almost crieed because iT reminds me of myself and a love i had for someone. BUt it is so nice to see that there are people out there who view a world so cold as i do, or at least in a way. Thank you for the post!!

[Dilan Gray]

You are just so great, did you know that? I love this! You show how cruel people can be. I especially loved the lines "mutual feelings we do share, the difference between you and I/I don't really care". It's even more of a slap in the face when someone hates you and you don't care if they do or not. I love it! Great poem! You both did so well!

[Sunni Davis]

Dark and beautiful. I think this is my new favorite from you.

[ImJustAMisguidedGhost]

Great poem, there's a lot of thoughtful description and metaphors in here.
I like this quite a lot. The emotion just spills out greatly.
Well done :D

[Grace Catherine C.]

Lovely, well written, great flow!

[Deactivated_BurningDemo..]

I love this one. Mainly because it has my name in it ;)
It's a great poem from one of the best dark poets I know. I'm looking falwards to working with you in the future.