I'm Sat Alone

I'm Sat Alone

A Poem by {A}shley {B}lack @-;-
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A poem about being treated different for progressing

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I’m Sat Alone 

Vicious glares and secretive whispers whilst I’m sat alone
laughter emits from their table really setting the tone

I shouldn’t have to change my standards 
So what if I choose to work hard?
If being treated differently for refusing to be lazy
Their judgements and feelings I discard 

Serpents all of them hissing and tearing at my heart 
their lashing tongues and secretive glares 
breaking down my barriers ripping me apart  

Why cant their oozing envy just be set aside 
I was once a welcomed member 
but I shall sit alone with pride 

I may not be a regular colleague but your support I had one time
you saw how hard I worked for this ladder that I climb
  envious of your bond that’s all I really miss
drowning out your banter and your dreadful hiss

I Am Sat Alone

I am A shadow to the person that you laid to rest
but I’m not here for you I’m here to do my best  

© 2011 {A}shley {B}lack @-;-


Author's Note

{A}shley {B}lack @-;-
I wrote this in my 15 minute break at work tidied it a bit
just a poem explaining how gaining responsibilities can make you an outcast

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I really like this poem and what it talks about. My dad is kind of like this at his work, the other people tease him because he is different and then also don't like how he sometimes works too hard and makes them all look bad. It is interesting how people don't want you to do your best, I think you captured this situation very well! Great poem!

Posted 13 Years Ago


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I love the flow of this...there is definitely a rhythm to it that is appealing as well as your word choice. Nicely done!

Posted 13 Years Ago


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It's impressive that you wrote in such a short time, the topic of this subject is really important i like what you said in this poem, you most definitely will sit alone in pride! You did a wonderful job in this poem Ashley, well done.

Posted 13 Years Ago


I love this poem, it really embodies how a lot of the smart people in school feel. They try so hard and people come down on them because of it. Great job :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Beautifully-written snapshot of Envy. Great job for a tea-break! Goes without saying be true to yourself, and fulfilment is yours, while they self-destruct, sad and confused, corroding from within. Keep it coming champ.......

Posted 13 Years Ago


"...I'm not here for you, I'm here to do my best..."
Great poem! Yes, diligence is usually rewarded with disdain from the colleagues you're outshining...but if they really ignore you 'cause of your dedication,they don't deserve your company anyway. Some people can't step up to your level, so they try to pull you down to theirs...so if that means sitting alone -
"...I shall sit alone with pride..."

Posted 13 Years Ago


Oh, yes, the petty workplace syndrome is always alive and well when one of a group begins to excel. I just rhymed accidentally. I must be a poet...or something. I enjoyed your poem -- you paint a nice visual of what can be a very uncomfortable situation and you provide a lesson in integrity. I have an editing note for you to consider: It is about the "I am sat alone" lines. Personally, I always have trouble using this particular English grammar rule so double check me on this. One should only say "I am sat alone" if they were physically placed in some spot -- otherwise if the person chose the spot and sat there on their own they would say "I sat alone". So in your poem, it appears to me that the person is choosing to be alone -- otherwise he/she could bow to the pressure of old friends, slack off, and then sit with them. But it could go either way, I guess depending on your intentions when you wrote it. This is why I always have trouble with the "am sat" grammar rule. I get confuseled. Mostly.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Oh, "oozing envy," love those choice of words! You produced so much in fifteen minutes. Its no wonder they envy you.

Posted 13 Years Ago


15 minutes? wow it takes ma that long to come up with one line sometimes lol

Posted 13 Years Ago


very clever I liked this very much

Posted 13 Years Ago


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