Third In Line

A poem that describes suffering from abuse

Third In Line

The thud of the door opens a perilous time

lashing out, barking orders “Family In Line”

Rooms not to standard work is not done 

releasing the clasp to his belt, now we must run

Mother protecting children as fist puts her down

grabbing his eldest pulling hair from the crown

I sit there reading of marvellous medicines and BFG

when this giant looks down towering over me

The mother reacts her youngest in tears

A boot to his face ignite her worst fears

 

A knife her only option a means to escape

running downstairs but now its too late

wrist fractured, nose broken by powerful hand

ribs broken, mouth bleeding for making a stand

one is dealt with now the eldest must pay

belt round the face a buckle mark lay 

This giant towers over me for the second time

 its always in sequence his fist does align

pain I can deal with but not being third in line  

Author's Note

Please give honest reviews

Reviews

[Dev]

That there is family abuse in this world, is perhaps the saddest thing. I mean we complain about bombs and guns but often many people don't say one thing about the fists and the kicks. They just live with it and that's sad. Such violence and subsequent anger that originates at home spreads to the streets. Your write was very vivid and hence very powerful. I can almost imagine what the family must go through every time the offender walk through the door. It's a very nice write.
I don't think anyone should live through something like this and I'm sorry if you had to...!!

[Stacey Watts]

Wow what a powerful poem. I am sorry you had to deal with that. I hope the circumstances are better now. Very well written piece. Amazing work.

[Hello, Goodbye]

kudos on this piece of poetry that matters..

[therisa]

As a survivor of abuse, your poem captures the feelings, of those people have during it, yet it doesn't fully carry the sense of fear, by the victims in your poem. Adding an extra layer to already powerful poem, about a subject matter most refuse to talk about, yet alone write about. Thanks Ashley for the courage to do so. :)

[steph]

oh my god.... This has got to be the darkest poem you have written I see nothing wrong with the technicallity...A tragedy, a sorrowful whim of victimization... but a profound piece

[Amy Marie]

Only my daughter's work has made me cry like your poem has today. It is so well written with not just words but feelings. Your imagery is amazing and well placed in your work. The subject is dark but a lot in life in unfortantely dark and you also can't have light without the dark. Thank you for giving me the opportunity of reading your work.

[Cherrie Palmer]

The broken images works together with power and force. The ending shows the need to be recognized and to confront

[trainwreck]

Full of pain and honestly. I liked it. The rhyme and pacing was very nice. This is a dark work. The lot to this is more realistic than most would have been. Good job.

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

so full of emotion I felt each word. This sends me back to a dark place in my life Ive been there and survived. Was this written from experience ? I hope not

[Brandon]

I was never third in line. I was always the one that put up the most fight. So I guess I never really thought about what that would be like. It's really a horrible topic but you're honest portrayal, unflinching and blunt, carves the wicked block into art. Good job =)

[A]

Well this is kinda tragic and very well described, very strong and powerful piece, great stuff, keep it up!