Third In Line

A poem that describes suffering from abuse

Third In Line

The thud of the door opens a perilous time

lashing out, barking orders “Family In Line”

Rooms not to standard work is not done 

releasing the clasp to his belt, now we must run

Mother protecting children as fist puts her down

grabbing his eldest pulling hair from the crown

I sit there reading of marvellous medicines and BFG

when this giant looks down towering over me

The mother reacts her youngest in tears

A boot to his face ignite her worst fears

 

A knife her only option a means to escape

running downstairs but now its too late

wrist fractured, nose broken by powerful hand

ribs broken, mouth bleeding for making a stand

one is dealt with now the eldest must pay

belt round the face a buckle mark lay 

This giant towers over me for the second time

 its always in sequence his fist does align

pain I can deal with but not being third in line  

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Dev]

That there is family abuse in this world, is perhaps the saddest thing. I mean we complain about bombs and guns but often many people don't say one thing about the fists and the kicks. They just live with it and that's sad. Such violence and subsequent anger that originates at home spreads to the streets. Your write was very vivid and hence very powerful. I can almost imagine what the family must go through every time the offender walk through the door. It's a very nice write.
I don't think anyone should live through something like this and I'm sorry if you had to...!!

[Grace Catherine C.]

Powerful, fantastic, very very good.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Very strong poem of abuse ... It is filled with images and words that cause eyes to tear and hearts to break. It reads very well, smooth flow...you can see this giant
pummeling the children and his wife.. This is very emotional.. Last verse kicks you ...
to know a person can or has learned to deal with pain..not a good thought but a very good poem.

Chloe

I have the cd from the picture.. a good one.

[Inkmoon]

Written in a lovely way. Still your poem is sad. The sadder fact is that such things really happen...
I wouldn't have the guts to write this. Which is the truth and only the truth. Just the dark side of it. Nice job

[Laura]

Wow! It was written magnificently! Fantastic job!

[Irish_Ranger]

Very powerful. I can see that this is coming from a very real perspective, and I'm glad you were able to put all this into words.

[A Soap Mess Stories]

Powerful imagery...easy to visualize the horror going through the mother's mind. Keep up the good work.

[Call Me Blu]

Very nice, I can't really say anything without bein repetetive, so.....Good job

[Clemmy]

Honestly, you have a way with your words, this piece is so vivid and it is carries so much weight with it that I love, but its lovely.... I love to read more of your stuff too.

[A-Lovely-Anxiety]

Beautiful poem. When I was reading this, my mind turned over more than one idea. Great work.