Locked Gates

When your heart is Broken you lock it up

Locked Gates

My Heart is coal, cold and black

warmth, love ,emotion I lack

Crushed one to many times my soul takes rest

Try to unlock these gates that’s your test

Once opened to a person I could trust

B***h! destroyed me, gave in to lust

Think you can complete me ?

I laugh in your face 

love isn’t a fairytale after such disgrace

locked gates, A thrown away key

no exceptions!

my heart will never be free

Author's Note

Short poem trying out a different tempo tell me what you think ?

Reviews

[GamingGal]

Pros: I like this tempo. Again, probably because it's closer to what I write, but we all have our preferences. Your rhyme scheme is good and adds flow to it that continues throughout the poem. And the idea is quite nice as well, something I can easily relate to. Once we get our heart broken so many times, we stop letting people close. I know I'm that way. I like the question in the middle of it and how you answer it in the following stanza as well.

Cons: None.

Overall: A well-written poem with a good idea behind it. I like it.

[NamelessBeast.]

I love the pace and the rhymes you've used. I also like Opened Gates, but this is darker; I love dark poetry. I think this is an amazingly sorrowful and painful poem.

[steph]

this is a good piece. I loved the sorrowful content and the style... and Excellent read

[Amy Marie]

First the title grabbed me, tempted me to read the poem. Then the poem took hold till the end of it. You described your pain and frustration perfectly and in a way opened yourself up long enough to help us feel that pain and frustration. At the same time giving the reader a dare. I look forward to reading more of your work.

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

really good sad but good I liked it

i felt all your emotions in this. you showed the darker side of love. it was strong and your style showed that. just amazing.

[Frankie Nguyen]

I loved this. The emotions and everything.

[Dische]

Such a familiar feeling to so many people, really well written

[Hello, Goodbye]

love the curiousness behind the imagery that you deliver.. its very interesting and provocative. I like the packed brevity and its contained force that drives it.

[Ashley Myers]

love it. i think a lot of people can relate to this. its sad to say but people that are suppose to love you dont always act the part an they end up hurting the one whos heart is on the line

[jessica Wray]

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