True Feelings

True Feelings

A Poem by {A}shley {B}lack @-;-
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A poem to a close friend Which I've been allowed to share

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True Feelings

your the light to my darkness 
the beat to my heart
your the only exception
I've loved you from the start 

Talented poet emotional art
hurts to see you go why must we part 
your my first waking moment 
my last before sleep
A longing to hold you
A feeling so deep 

So for now I must kiss you
a gentle goodbye
See you again soon my smile you provide


© 2011 {A}shley {B}lack @-;-


Author's Note

{A}shley {B}lack @-;-
You know who you are and you know the truth

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Pros: I can feel the emotion in this poem. It's sweet and gentle and caring; I like it quite a lot. The rhyme scheme helps it flow, but it has a natural flow of its own. These little scenes you create, I can see them quite well.

Cons: The second line in the second stanza and the last line in the last stanza are mildly longer (perhaps for rhyming reasons?) and kind of throw off the flow a bit.

Overall: This is a good poem :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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that is really good u could sale it

Posted 13 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Simple wonderful song, I love it because it captures the perfect moment. Thank you for this aspiring picture and emotional touch. I hope to find more of your work that will refresh my day so nicely.

Posted 13 Years Ago


How you express the feeling of a goodbye is unique and all so true.

Posted 13 Years Ago


aww this is a sweet poem. It shows the loving side of you that you have instead of the dark side. I love it

Posted 13 Years Ago


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I am enjoying this theme more of your writings, it's cheerful and loving, you should write about love more often you do it beautifully, Keep writing and shining ! :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


A very pleasant and sweet piece. Nice change of pace. Too much negative, no matter how well written, can be hard to take for readers... I'm guilty of that myself. Enjoyable and uplifting poem.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Pros: I can feel the emotion in this poem. It's sweet and gentle and caring; I like it quite a lot. The rhyme scheme helps it flow, but it has a natural flow of its own. These little scenes you create, I can see them quite well.

Cons: The second line in the second stanza and the last line in the last stanza are mildly longer (perhaps for rhyming reasons?) and kind of throw off the flow a bit.

Overall: This is a good poem :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is so sweet. It's honest and from the heart. I hope they feel the same way back.

Posted 13 Years Ago


I liked this heartfelt love poem... nice rhythm. Maybe perhaps a little tuning of the last line "my smile you provide" or maybe not, see what other people think.

Posted 13 Years Ago


I love this poem, it is so beautiful. Simple but says a lot, which I love. Poems don't have to be complex to express their meaning and I think some people forget that sometimes, but you didn't here. Truly wonderful! Definitely one of my favorites!

Posted 13 Years Ago



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{A}shley {B}lack @-;-
{A}shley {B}lack @-;-

Sheriffhales, Shropshire , United Kingdom



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I Am Ashley Black (an alter ego ) I have a dark mind when it comes to my poetry as the strongest emotions come from negative RETURNING- I have been distant from this site for a while but I am fina.. more..

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