A Mask

A poem about presenting yourself to be accepted by society

A MASK

The person you see is not the real me it’s a mask I wear

To hide my identity 

You may know my laugh my voice my eyes but what I show you

They are all lies

You wont ever know the real me it hides deep inside

So what if I said I liked you what if I lied

Music is my release to a mask I hide behind it calms any stress

And it helps me unwind

My mask does have cracks and you can see behind but you might not 

Like what is on my mind

Take small steps and back away because this mask wont be lifting today

My mask is my shield from a mind that’s been scarred I prefer you to see my whole façade   

Author's Note

Honest opinions please thank you for reading

Reviews

[Cora Lennox]

My first sentence is going to sound really harsh, but please read a little after it, and I promise it gets better. Here goes.

The poem would be good if it wasn't about a mask.

I'm sorry, but the mask is a promising canditate for the Most Overused Metaphor in Poetry History award. All the bits of your poem that don't contain the word "mask?" Yeah, they're amazing. The line "a shield from a mind that's been scarred" is brilliant. But when people initially see your poem, they have an "Oh, it's just another poem about a mask" reaction, which does not at all do your poem justice. There are many other things that can hide a face. A veil. A scarf. Maybe a particular kind of mask? You could google masks and see what you come up with. There are tons of things you could do to give your otherwise captivating and deep poem the originality it deserves. I'm reallyreallyreally sorry if I sounded to harsh, by the way.

[NamelessBeast.]

The mask is an overused, tired metaphor; one I personally dislike. However, I love this poem's simplicity. You may have just changed my mind about the mask metaphor.

[J.M]

Some do say masks are overused, but that's because they are the perfect metaphor - they personify an emotion and if used correctly can be immensely powerful. This was a fantastic poem - extremely vivid and alive. I particularly like the format,which is unusual but very effective. It seems to exemplify the cracking of the mask, but that though you sometimes catch a glimpse of what lies within, the smooth facade will always return.

[Frankie Nguyen]

I really loved this one.

[Jenny Nelson]

The last line is a perfect ending for the piece. An honest and open feel to the write. A heavy situation put almost lightly... makes it easy to read and process, which is really nice once in awhile. Excellent.

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

we both ware a mask and Sometimes people put up walls, not to keep others out, but to see who cares enough to break them down so I hope you find what you need

[steph]

Now this poem is good, its coy and has just enough volume in it to keep my interest piqued. you once again have nailed all the technical requirements and this one has good emotion direction in it. I really liked the revelation that people often times wear masks. Good read

[Caitlynxoxo]

"You wont ever know the real me it hides deep inside
So what if I said I liked you what if I lied"

I speak from expirience of wearing multiple masks, refusing to let the world see who i am from fear of not being accepted. This poem made me think. It made me wonder what other masks i may unknowingly wear, and i love it when poems make me do this. It means the poem has fufilled it's purprose of bringing the reader to new heights and imagination. well done! Thanks for sharing :)

xoxo Caitlyn xoxo

[Cherrie Palmer]

p.s. not all poems have to be a new voice never heard before, but what makes it good is that you have taken your turn in expressing it. Metaphors are never overused just missed used at times

[Cherrie Palmer]

people spend their whole lives working up the never to just be their selves, and this poem hits that fear right on the head.

[A]

This is very true, we all put masks; and sometimes a different one for each group of people, to be accepted socially, i personally believe you should be who you are whether you're accepted or not because you'll lose your real self if u keep pretending, it's the worst to lose who you really are in this race of life, Well done !