Tear The Tears

A poem from a broken heart which contains a suicidal moment

Tear The Tears

Words written for ones eyes to which once brought happiness now accumulate tears how can such beautiful meaningful words carve the heart with ease once bringing smiles now cause an aching throbbing heart to destroy itself

the page is held the tears roll down the familiar cheek the vision becomes impaired but the action is clear a pull a rip the sound of those words being split against their will 

Sobbing as scripture lays on the ground catching the tears on the tears of those once loving words which one brought happiness 

Observing the past in captured moments wall hangings so meaningful a bond so strong and pure a love displayed in such a prideful manner the glass shattered as a tear rolls down the familiar cheek the captured image becomes distorted and its previous moment is lost as a participant is torn 

sobbing as moments lay on the ground catching the tears on the tears of a past that wishes to be forgotten 

the blade held the letter written a simple word an apology the s for the sadness the o for the observation the r for the reality the r for the reluctance the y for the opposite start to the question of a second chance

the cold blade separates the skin the blood dripping the tear rolling down that familiar cheek the tears falling on the tears of moments and scripture the crimson droplets spread as the darkness impairs the vision once so clear

Author's Note

Please Be Honest in what you think

Reviews

[Invisible Ink]

1) There are some parts here where the word choice and imagery are just great... I especially like these...
... words carve the heart....
... a pull a rip the sound of those words being split against their will...
Observing the past in captured moments wall hangings...
...the s for the sadness the o for the observation the r for the reality the r for the reluctance the y for the opposite start to the question of a second chance... (this line is a little poem in itself, acrostic maybe?, title: sorry)

I'd love to see these images expounded on, they are very interesting and original.

2) The structure and lack of punctuation make it difficult for me to read. I'd rather see it in a usual form, for example...

Words written for ones' eyes
to which once brought happiness,
now accumulate tears.
How can such beautiful meaningful words
carve the heart with ease,
once bringing smiles,
now cause an aching
throbbing heart to destroy itself?

This is how I am guessing these lines & meaning go. This would be easier for me to read and understand.

3) I'm not so keen on the ending, personally, as far as context goes. I think it is much more difficult, interesting and brave to figure out life after a broken heart, rather than suicide, which seems the easy way out. Although the poem doesn't explicitly say suicide, so it might just be cutting? Anyway, that's just me.

4) I like the overall idea that an inanimate object, the paper, and the words themselves can have completely opposite meanings and evoke opposite feelings depending on the situation.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Heartache is a solitaire moment that you carry as through with this poem. It was tastefully done and leaves the reader on a sullen note. Well done.

[Vartul]

Honestly? You should write stories. Your descriptive powers are very good and you have a sense of words. This poem is really good, but i believe you have much more unexplored talent. Keep writing!

[shelbylugal]

I loved the imagination that you put into this poem. I could see it as though it was a little movie running in my head; every tear, every letter of s-o-r-r-y, every line you put down. I thought it was beautiful

[Dische]

WOW! that was deep

[Dilan Gray]

Very powerful, I like it.

[Inkmoon]

very nice choice of words. One can see the story hidden behind each and every letter.

[Jeff]

Great imagery!

wow, i only wish it was longer. it really pulls at your heartstrings. i can feel the emotion pouring out of it. amazing.

[Cynically]

Very well written, and great imagery.

[stellasautelle]

I love it.. I think it's wonderfully written :)