I Thought I Was Dark

A poem with competitive darkness

I thought I was Dark

Being there is all I wished 

I just wanted to care

holding on to your every word 

wishing I was there

planting seeds of envy 

breaking lovers trust

embracing my last breath 

your clearly not fussed 

I thought I was dark 

heartless and depressed

patience and overwhelming anger

amongst emotions that you test

why do you keep me lingering?

awaiting to be crushed 

Should I give up already 

although my heart you have touched

I thought I was dark 

but compared to you I’m grey

knowing you’re the puppet master

I’m your puppet I must obey 

never hearing your voice 

a distance between us grows

your so much darker than me dear

And it defiantly shows

I care about your point of view

any issues that may arise

you care about yourself 

or many other guys

I’m left here heart in hands

not cared for to say the least

I may as well make an impact

better off deceased 

so once again I’m driven to my final stand

Iodine at the ready 

knife in my free hand 

Is this what is needed 

For the attention that I crave

think you know anything about me

I’m not just another slave

I have feelings as well you know

I also feel pain 

you continue to be darker than me

I will end this childish game

sorry to everyone that cares

I doubt by her I will be missed

Signing out of this life 

but being there is all I wished

Author's Note

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Reviews

I have such a hard time expressing myself in Reviews!
Though I write this pain every day for the last 8 months I am trying to pull out of this painful funk! It was an awesome write..congrats, I connected with the pain for sure! .

[TylerG]

Liking the rhyme scheme alot, good flow keep it up man!

[♥Kaitlyn♥]

a very powerful poem :)
I think it is very good!

100/100

[Rose Masen]

"sorry to everyone that cares
I doubt by her I will be missed
Signing out of this life
but being there is all I wished"

Amazing, painful, sad, and intense. "Signing out of this life"- that one single line made me gasp. I don't think I've ever read anything as such- so powerful and potent in just a few short words. Lovely.

[Ashley Myers]

the sting we all feel from rejection. well portrayed

[fernii]

This poem is so deep and I felt like i really connected and related to it. It is really interesting and I enjoyed reading it. Keep writing. :)

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

So sad and emotional and I completely get what your saying here. I'm truly sorry you feel this way. Ive tried suicide I dont recommend it Ive seen that dark place a place where everything is black and the air so thick it hurts to breath and you cant think of nothing else but ending it Death isn't the answer surviving it is.

I think you need a hug a squezy hug!

[trainwreck]

This is fabulous. I love it. Great write yet again.

[guiltyascharged]

Oh. So sad. Suicide is horrible, should not be done. I really like this piece, though. It's deep.

[Angela]

EMOTIVE. Ugly beautiful.That you can take the destructive source of pain and turn it into eloquence is a testament to your skill." I thought I was dark but compared to you I am grey." That line will be with me for a while.