TwinZ

Another colab with Gwen Goad About twins

TwinZ

I’m ashamed to admit that you’re my twin

so weak and nerdy 

leaving me perplexed 

our image is all we share 

when you try to become annexed

Just leave me to do my own thing

I don’t want to hang around

I want to be so far from you 

always dragging me down

I worked hard for my reputation 

feared among our peers 

teaching you another lesson 

don’t show me your balling tears

you say I will die young

when all I protect is you

I take all the hassle you would receive

but I keep it from your view 

I’m not always going to be here

I wish that you could fight

your so dependent on my courage

what happens when I’m not in sight

socially you are oblivious 

to the stress that you cause

Then you have the audacity 

to point out all my flaws 

I trust you more than anything

a long future you will brave

all this training on self belief

so your own life you can save

our image is a curse in your shadow I remain

I may be the big guy when young 

but you have the brain

So at the minute we are each a one 

But in the future we will be two 

you may hate me now

but I won’t stop loving you

Author's Note

Read Gwen Goads poem Twins
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/pinkgwen/683907/
Please review be as hones as always

Reviews

[Midday_Mystery]

I like the meaning behind this poem.. Siblings all the way back to Cain and Able have had these issues arise in thier live but the last line is what makes all the conflict more meaningful, because the love is rarely lost

So at the minute we are each a one
But in the future we will be two
you may hate me now
but I won’t stop loving you


I dont see this as a twisted piece, rather a excellent devotion to two who are one twins. God Bless you and Gwen on a marvellous write. Tell her if she would like to befriend me she may. 100/100 and going in my favorites Wonderful to read your work again Ashley! I missed your verse

[Margaret Marie Hubbard]

Ahh! A sweet taste of reminder to me. My favorite twins Castor and Pollux.

[♥Kaitlyn♥]

Really good job!
I love the emotion in it
:)

100/100

[northern monkey]

Like it. Emotional eloquence of a high degree. Compelling story-telling.

[Rose Masen]

"socially you are oblivious
to the stress that you cause
Then you have the audacity
to point out all my flaws "

Anger within this. I loved this piece. Definitely not what I expected from the title. :)

[trainwreck]

Very nice. I like it.

[howlfjdks]

Tightly bound souls.

[Frankie Nguyen]

I love this. It's like me and my cousin. I'm older and I can take care of myself. She's smart and I was always sticking up for her. Now we go to different schools.

[OT]

nice! the toil of the siblings - even more so twins - sharing a face, like a tangible shadow perhaps! I like!

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

This is very well written. I love the point/counterpoint to Gwen's work. My Aunt and Uncle lived very separate lives, but there was a tangible psychic bond. Glad to read you won't stop loving your twin, Mr. Black.
Nicely done!

[ImJustAMisguidedGhost]

Very honest and greatly written. No matter how much you want them away, the love is still there. A descriptive and meaningful poem, I like it quite a lot. Great write :D