This sounds like something Gollum would say, if he could do poetry with his teeny warped mind.
From start to finish, the most exquisite examples of human obscenity.
From the pretense that 'i never liked you anyway', into the exposure of this lie, through a need to brag on dirty deeds done. And then terminated with the ultimate destroyer of reason, Empty and Unwarranted threats.
Repulsive personality, The Ripper, without a mind.
Within the bones of a fairly normal seeming person, this voice is that of the raped child, never healed, but further damaged by 'protective institution or entities', then the scabs picked and miserable of thought. I would say a meth addled tweaker might fit the bill, but only if the person was reduced to a barely perceptible shadow before submitting to a n even darker angel.
This smells strongly of Fear and Hate, borne of Comparison.
Pretty well written though, I am thinking it would make a good metal tune.
I do like this a lot people should read Gwen's "lived through the darkness" before they read your poem so they understand that your acting out the part of the cruel a*****e ... or else get the wrong impression. Had I not read hers first I might have took it literally lol but I really thought this was great
Very well written. Like the line "your feelings now crushed to dust" None of the rhyming is forced and the rhythm is at a quick pace. Deep and haunting. I'll sure lock my f*****g gate, lol.
Very nice, I must say that I do enjoy your writing
Its truly refreshing to read your work.
From what I have read of your work I
Can truly say it is good without having to lie to
You and to myself. Keep up the excellent job.
Wow, truely impacting to the heart! How can someone endure so much torcher! This can be taken in so many different forms, I'll give it a shot to what I think it may be percieving! If I wrote something like this I would probably be writing about my inner deamon, alot of people torcher themselves the worst then the human race could! Self addiction on how they percieve themselves with hatered ect. I could of been far off but either way extremely powerful words! I look forward to more!
This was too harsh and cruel! It's well-written I'm not saying it's bad
but I personally would preferred if there was some positivity or delight at some part. that's what i think; otherwise good job.
I Am Ashley Black (an alter ego ) I have a dark mind when it comes to my poetry as the strongest emotions come from negative
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