I'm No Sheep

About being an individual

I’M NO SHEEP

Look at me don’t like what you see? tough! because I’m not a sheep to society

I love my bright colours although I wear black
 my personality is my colour and that’s a fact

Look at me don’t like what you see? tough because I’m not a sheep to society

I love my music heavy as can be
 who says I shouldn’t like it?
 I listen to what I want you don’t control me 

Look at me don’t like what you see? tough because I’m not a sheep to society

I stick out because I’m different
 I want to be me
 who says I’m not the normal one
and your just different from me

 Look at me don’t like what you see? tough because I’m not a sheep to society

I don’t judge people by sex or sexuality
 I believe in free speech and freedom
 be who you want to be 

 Look at me don’t like what you see? tough because I’m not a sheep to society

I don’t like being told how I should act
 or always trying to please other people
Their ambitions I lack
 I'm sorry that’s just not me
I'm Ashley Black an individual not a sheep to society

Author's Note

I wrote this about 5 years ago my style has defiantly changed but would like an opinion on my earlier work please

Reviews

[GamingGal]

Pros: I love repetition in a poem, and you repeating that one line was nice. And it made sense to keep repeating it, which is always good. Your rhyme scheme was good and it added an extra flow to the poem, made it easier to read. The story you tell is interesting as well. I must say, this is one of my favorites of yours. I like this style quite a lot. Probably because it's closer to mine, but still, it's nice.

Cons: None that I can see really. Maybe a couple flow hiccups here and there, as well as grammar/punctuation mistakes, but we all make those.

Overall: I like this poem, especially the idea of it. Not giving in to society? Very nice.

[Dizzy]

I Love this poem. XD "I love my bright colours although I wear black
my personality is my colour and that’s a fact"

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

I like this one a lot nice flow and style nicely done. I loved the lines "I love my bright colours although I wear black my personality is my colour and that’s a fact" wish I had thought of it lol

[Caitlynxoxo]

I liked how you repeated "Look at me don’t like what you see? tough because I’m not a sheep to society" before each new line, because it really set the tone for the rest of the poem! :) I liked it. It had some fantastic descirption (which i always look for in poems and stories, etc) and over all, it was an enjoyable read! Thanks for sharing.

xoxo Caitlyn xoxo


ps- it was interesting to see how your writing style has changed over the span of five years, but i think that even five years ago, you were making wonderful, insightful poems :)

i liked it. its intersting to see the progress youve made as a writter. it flowed well and i likedthe topic you chose.

[Frankie Nguyen]

Reminds me of me.
I have lived in what people might call the semi-ghetto so I've had people trying to make me look the part
sadly for them I never cared
I am who I am and it'll never change.
This poem really hit home with me in more ways than one (:
I really loved it.

[Dische]

This makes me think of me when I was younger abd everyone tried to make me look "cool" but I was happy the way I was

[Hello, Goodbye]

Indeed.. forsake conformity.. I like it. It may have been a bit simplistic in imagery and expressive vocabulary.. but obviously you have gotten so much better. But to be clear good stuff non-the-less..

[Ashley Myers]

its really good. its deffinately a different style but thats good lol. it kinda switches things up on here

[steph]

This is good.. The message is excellent, the content is good, but I can Definately tell you have evolved over the 5 year period, the poem seemed as if you held back a little, and it also seemed like you were concentrating too much on the technicals, than letting it flow freely and balancing it later... Your poetic style is remarkable today, and this poem reveals the beginings of you true potential

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the repetition gives a clear rhythm to the piece..I like it