Listen to me!

This i wrote just 30 min ago...

What dont you understand dad?

I told you I was feeling unstable

And all you did was laugh

You got up and left the room

Leaving me to my doom.

Since you did'nt care

What I said

I should'nt care

About the promice we made

The promice were I would stop

Stop using the razor to cut myself

So let me stand up

Walk over to my phone

Remove the back

Grab the razor

Then put it to my wrist

Press down hard

And then slice quick

Watch my blood

Run down my arm

Watch the blood fall to the ground

I hear you walking down the hall

Put the razor back in my phone

Grab the pillow

Then lay down

You walk in

Thinking i'm sleeping

You turn off the light

To leave me dreaming...

Author's Note

What do you think??

Reviews

[joshua deathdealer]

Very sad writing about how parents neglect their children without even knowing. Very well written.

[A little tipsy]

I couldn't understand why some people choose to do this to themselves when life has so much to offer. Painful write you nhave penned with a good message for parents who need to pay much closer attention to their children.

[Daytonight]

Such a very sad and painful tale. It catches and holds the reader so spell bound that it is easy to overlook the couple of spelling and grammar errors, but they are easy fixes anyway. This is written with so much feeling. Well done. Keep up the great work.

[Coyote Poetry]

Sometime hard for people to understand another person. I have raised four children. I did my best to keep my distance so they could grow and learn. Things like cutting is hard to understand for old people. We did a lot of drinking to kill our pain. Many ways to scar your self. Cutting isn't a good thing. Better to find another way to lose the bad energy. I tell people you think your world is bad. Look at the real world. Maybe we don't have it so bad? I like the way you wrote the story. In the end. We are responsible for all our deeds and actions. We decide our fate and where we want to be. Thank you for a powerful poem.
Coyote

[TJ]

what a tragic poem. tragic but beautiful. what a sad story of a girl who's pain was ignored, and felt like there was no way out.

a couple spelling errors but still a great piece