Up and Down the Way i Fall.

Up and Down the Way i Fall.

A Poem by sivan

Gone with the wind on a breeze so calm not even a feather would stir,

I sat and watched you leave without the faintest trace of tears.

 

The structured words you uttered; clear and smoothly unfamiliar,

A methodically planned goodbye; the timing quite perculiar.

 

Untrue sentences formed through lips deceived by yearning eyes.

I see you standing in the mirror looking into your own demise.

 

Blinded momentarily by a thick haze of uncertainty

You stumble at the feet of self induced pity.

 

But rising so fast that no one might view-

The moment you let life slip by you.

© 2011 sivan


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another touching poem. you capture the sadness of a soul un-moored from its own love of self. life is a highway that leads to as many different venues as one could are to imagine. exits all along the way. the beauty of exits is there's always an on-ramp not far from where you got off. so one can always continue on life's journey.

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My favorite line is '' untrue sentences formed through lips deceived by yearning eyes''. Very Powerful!!!! Brilliant writing .

Posted 13 Years Ago


another touching poem. you capture the sadness of a soul un-moored from its own love of self. life is a highway that leads to as many different venues as one could are to imagine. exits all along the way. the beauty of exits is there's always an on-ramp not far from where you got off. so one can always continue on life's journey.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You have composed each line with a mounting emotion that we all succumb to at some point in time. I found this well penned.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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sivan
sivan

Durban, South Africa



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I am a student of computer engineering... very technical yes but i like to get lost in the creativity of poetry and writing. Im an out and proud lesbian and if anyone doesn't like that well then that .. more..

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