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Vintage Recording of a Montage of Farewells

There is a special kind of emptiness that you feel when you get your heart broken
Every nerve in your body becomes cold, numb
Your eyes are just lenses
Your hands are a shelf
Your ears are a subwoofer
And every thing you do becomes senseless

There is a special kind of emptiness that you feel when you don’t have a heart
When you don’t know what it feels to have your heart throb, or your heartbroken
But the best thing you have to hold onto is a special kind of heartache
Its called yearning, and dreaming
I’ve felt this kind of pain
Where you have so much time on your hands that you can only think
But you have nothing and no one to think about
So you think about everything
What’s wrong with me
Why can’t I get them to look this way
Is it my hair
Is it my body

There is a special kind of emptiness you feel after you press the end button
This one is physically cold
Where your bedroom feels hallowed 
And your skin is alive with the scary kind of chills
As I lay stripped of my dignity
With dry hands and wet eyes
And I have so much time on my hands that i can only think
But i have nothing and no one to think about
So i think about everything and everyone 
What’s wrong with me
Why can’t I get them to look this way
Is it my hair
Is it my body
Is it my voice

There is a special kind of emptiness that someone with anxiety feels
You become paranoid, scared
Your reflexes are a barricade
Every beautiful and every thank you
Ricochets off of you like a fresh water tide to latex
I have sad days on vinyl
Goodbyes on vinyl
A vintage, recorded montage of farewells
Greetings from people who have walked out before they walked in
You get used to the emptiness
Personalize the space with your favourite trinkets and photographs
My space is black
There’s a painting of a woman on the wall with a sliding window
The woman is white
Her body is not
There’s a collection of CD’s on the floor, and a bed that has been ripped apart by sleeplessness in the middle
No doors
I’ve made it my home

There’s a special kind of emptiness you feel when you’re alone
I guess we all are sometimes
Alone in our bedrooms on a friday night
Table for one at McDonalds, Tuesday afternoons
Blues eyes, green eyes
Pink hair
The 0.4 percent
The weekends when you have so much time on your hands that you can only think
But have nothing and no one to think about
So you think about everything, everyone, anything, something, nothing…
Whats wrong with me
Why can’t I get them to look this way
Is it my hair
Is it my body
Is it my voice
Is it my skin
Is it me?
Yeah, I’ve made it my home