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Please review my poem !

10 Years Ago


Hi all! I would really appreciate if you would review my poem, i'm new here :) 
Both danish and english version 

Danish version:

Hvad er det her for dig?
For mig er det alt, for dig er det intet

Hvad vil det sige at være et par,
når vi intet par er?

Hvis du vil det her,
sig det,
ellers skrid ad helvede til!

Er det her værd min tid,
eller er min tid mere værd?

For jeg er mere værd,
end din version af mig som mær

Skrevet af ANSO

English version:

What is this to you?
To me it's everyting, to you it's nothing

What does it mean to be a couple,
When we're anything but that

If you want this,
SAY IT,
If not go to hell

Is this worth my time,
Or is my time more worth?

Because I'm more worth,
Than your version of me as a ho. 

Written by ANSO

Re: Please review my poem !

10 Years Ago


I liked it. Though it was freeverse which i usually dont like, it was written well. Keep up the good work.

Re: Please review my poem !

10 Years Ago


There was a lot of raw emotion here. Your poem strikes a chord with many people who ever have been in a relationship. I liked it. It was easy to understand, flowed nicely, and wasn't fifty billion years long. :)

Re: Please review my poem !

10 Years Ago


i liked the structure and approach you used when writing this poem :)