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a puddle of blood on the floor

then the bath water turned pink

my insides were screaming

something was floating in the water

i couldn't breathe when i realized'

we had made a work of art

and before i even realized it existed

it was gone

i pass a billboard on my way home from work everyday

made to discourage abortions

on it, a beautiful baby girl

it reads, "i have a heartbeat after only 13 days!"

and i wonder about that thing met in the bathtub'

how many days was it's heart beating?

why couldn't i tell?

you said it was probably for the best

i said it didn't matter, anyway

i lied

and i am alone again

the last thing we had together

lived inside me and died