Write = Get Reviews Forum new poem i just wrote need som..

The vocabulary use is playful and fun to read, but I'm having a lot of trouble understanding any sort of rhythm because there's no line breaks. I'd love to reread this piece once it has been more structured because I feel like I missed a lot of your intent.

thank you.. for some reason the format didnt come out well when i uploaded it, I will fix it sso you can better review it.

Your dreams will not die,they have a mind of their own they are aliveand when you give life to that dream when you allow it to flourish it begins to beamall you ever wanted can exist and come trueas long as you sprinkle a little faith and let it brewand some hope to make it bubblethen the ultimate ingredient determinationdetermination along with focuscause when you eyes on the prize there is a deep penetrating concentration that lies, lies beyond the road, that forks over therecause when you trust you dreams you and them will have no fearno hesitation about the road less takenfor at that moment you will feel destineddestined to be all that you ever wanted to be and having prepared for that moment success will be a dance you know all to well