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life today

11 Years Ago


fighting amongst the coldness-
and lonely darkness all around,
i tried to dream of a warm face-
that in truth was never found;
i stretched my arm to the unknown,
to get the feel of the weather-
but all the hearts have turned stone
with dried and dead lives under.


pale and morbid sunlight-
has somehow lost its all life-
stares vacantly all night-
as here, the morn could not thrive. 
i feel on my shoulder
no one breathes to console,
only the storm gets stronger
drills through me a deep hole.

i feel weak and hungry-
i know how i must end
world around me is angry-
within it, i must blend.
half my heart has turned stone
what is left, will soon be-
love that's so far unknown,
will never ever gonna find me.  

Re: life today

11 Years Ago


nice work....

Re: life today

10 Years Ago


i eally enjoyed reading this poem. i like the rythm it has and the deep descriptions. Its flows seemlessly keep up the good work. And please check out my stuff as well.

Re: life today

10 Years Ago


Good work and has emotion, which is great, but there's some errors that could do with correcting :  "but all the hearts have turned stone" - change to "all the hearts have turned to stone"   "i tried to dream of a warm face" - is this supposed to be "face" or is it meant to be "place"?"lost its all life" - "lost all it's life""half my heart has turned stone" - change to "half my heart has turned to stone"        Thanks and please review mine when you can.

Re: life today

10 Years Ago


This Is a Really Good Poem, A few changes like in the sentence
will never ever gonna find me.
I would change to
For it shall never find me
Other than That it is great!