We Suck - A Vampire Group Forum A Favor?

Hey friends, I just completed work on my first real horror story. It's called The Nightmare. It's not very long and I would really love some feedback.

I feel like it's sort of getting looked over and that's not cool. So if you could leave me some reviews, I would be in your debt.

It's not really a vampire story, but I'm still learning afterall.


Thanks guys!!