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I like it14 Years Agoit was short and to the point. You used the words well. Sometimes short poems say the most!
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Elizabeth My Neighbor14 Years AgoElizabeth My Neighbor..
My neighbor Elizabeth is a lonely
wealthy old lady, around 75, left with a dumb servant to take care of household
tasks.. Sitting in my room I can see Elizabeth
if she is out of her house. Every morning and evening Elizabeth comes out to water her plants. From
the garden she can see my room but she cant identify whether I am in the room
or not.
Elizabeth says she began
to notice my room when she realized that I get up around the same time of her
waking up. And she noticed that nobody in my house woke up at that time. It is
true that similarity paves the way for attachments. She noticed that I am
almost alone in my house as I preferred solitude to socializing. I detected
that it is my mother who injected this norm into her head.
As the days went by, it
seemed Elizabeth
wanted to increase number of similarities between me and her . She insisted
that I must make a small garden in front of my room. I accepted. And she was
happy. She said that I must pray well and recite such and such prayers
everyday. I accepted . She was very happy. She said I must visit her often and
listen to her bible teachings . I accepted and she was happy. She said I must
attend holy mass every morning before I set out for work. I accepted. And she
was extremely happy.
Dear friends when
the rainy season ended the plants in my garden shriveled and almost died as I
often forgot to water them. After my personal meditation I found it difficult
to find time recite her prayers. So I quitted. I was late at the office on the
days I attended the Holy mass (I am sorry).Whenever I went to see her I
preferred smiles of flowers in the garden to her sermons about Christ. Once I
frankly admitted it to her. And I could
hardly master the art of socializing. However I tried, I was at my best when I
am alone not otherwise.
Elizabeth doest come often to befriend me
nowadays. I feel so sorry. After all who told her that similarity is the only
foundation upon which friendships are built?
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Re: Inroduce yourselves.14 Years AgoHey I'm Ed and I listen to anything except hardcore rap.
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GLAD YOU LIKE THE CHALLENGE14 Years AgoI want to do the title and topics on different areas to give everyone a chance to write what they love or what is the area they like to write about.
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reply to your poem14 Years Agothis is a great poem using the title and the topic I gave. Thank you for posting this one for all of us in the group to read.
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I Totally Understand14 Years AgoYeah, I'll totally do that!
But what sucks with writing a book is that no one ever reads it! They just review or something to get points sometimes. So, I think we should make a pact. We should review each others' stuff. |
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Midnight Splendor14 Years AgoOh- This is going to be good. love the title.
Art
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sweet14 Years Agothats awesome
thanks for shareing with me :)
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good job14 Years AgoVery good job !2 or 3 lines no more then 4 lines, for now !
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Good one!14 Years AgoI liked this!
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About your topic14 Years AgoMany pictures in the net which has such meaning about friendship, its different when we write or draw something about friendship for me I am not too good at art better for me to write :)
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Hellena14 Years AgoI really like your quote... A lot !
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Write!14 Years AgoRachel Yes you can put anything you want.. That shows the power of your writings. I'll be sure I'll comment the writings you put up. |
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FOR FURUBA CLUB14 Years AgoI LIKE THE FIRST BOOK CAUSE IT'S THE FIRST ONE!!!!!
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Hi! :)14 Years AgoMy name is Kylie, I write poetry mostly. I've written one story, lol. My poems are from real life things that happen in my life. I write about people, hurt, love, some erotic, friends, and family. Whatever comes to my mind, I write it. I think everyone has their own way of writing and I am glad I got invited here. I dont usually write in groups, but I did in this own, because I am honored to have been in it. Thank you Haifa :)
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hi14 Years Agohey ya I am Kit Kat so how do we post a write?
I've never been in a group before.
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LET ME INTRODUCE MYSELF14 Years AgoI'm Salvatore Buttaci ("Sal" is fine) and live with the love of my life, Sharon, in West Virginia. I have been writing and seeing my work in print since 1957 when I was sixteen and had an essay published in the Sunday New York News. I write poems, stories, plays, letters, etc. everyday, which I send out for hopeful publication. Writers, in my humble opinion, need to study the writing craft so we can constantly improve our work.
I thank you for inviting me to this group. Hopefully we can do some good writing together. |
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^^14 Years AgoFirs off, thanks for inviting me to join this group... I feel flattered ^^ lol
Um, hi, you can call me BlueOrchid... I love writing and have quite a lot of writes, which tends to always be pretty dark. I always "return the love" and review people back, so if anyone is bothered, feel free to check out my stuff... |
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begining the next chapter14 Years AgoThere are a couple of ways you could open the next chapter. if you want the end result to be your main charictors being ambushed in an ally maby somthing can happen that makes a chase scene maby the hawk can leave a trail of dead people... innocent people he has killed as he passed them. and your charictors follow it to the Ally. you could even open it half way through a fight with the thugs. i should probably read all of the chapters so i can give you some better help but im so busy latly.
Catch ya
Matt
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