Underground Writers Network Forum Challenge of the Week ~ #19

I know, I know, I should have posted this one yesterday... but time is just not enough... who ever though of 24 hour days never knew what getting busy was :P

This week's challenge will run from today until next Friday, so that all have enough time to play around with it and enjoy it.

This challenge is called: The Freedom Box

It consists of writing a short story (no more than (500 words) or poem, that ends with the sentence: "She touched the little box in her pocket and smiled to herself."

Let your imagination go wild and have fun creating!


Love,


Val

My Entry

Here's my submission.

yeah. okay, this is the first challenge forum I have taken part in.
I think I just grade them, according to my opinion.
Okay, I liked The Promise more than Best Served Cold simply because it stirred up emotion in me. It moved me. It was shorter, I believe, in length, and yet it seemed to say more. I got a whole story of a girls deep love of her departed father, and her memory of a promise made. The girls challenge comes in the form of doubt, which is dispelled by a note she finds from her father.
Best Served Cold, a simple story of revenge by use of witchcraft, still had some good points. The author obviously enjoys writing scenes of passion, since the story itself was imbedded in passion. Not a horrible story, but still no more than a rough draft. Should be longer I think. Maybe expand on the charactors by exploring their emotions and reactions to things.
The third story I unfortunately couldnt access. Maybe I missed something. Probably.
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Here is my version:

i'm new to the group so i guess i'll start with 19 and work backwards

I ran across a website that posts 55 word stories and I thought it would be an interesting experiment to combine the two. Thus, why you have a 55 word story.



Cheers!

Rob

Do I get disqualified from the challenge by writing more than 500 words? I got a little carried away and went over by 200 words!

I vote for The Collector, even if I missed cut off time. The piece is absolutely wonderful!

Yes I agree The Collector is a very good write. I liked it, but I have to vote for- #19 and work backwards, by Misanthropic. I liked the romance and humor in his piece and he kept within the 500 word count, that I, myself felt was a real challenge.
I'm so sorry, Felicia, please don't hate me. ::sad::

I know i'm late i just joined the site and i enjoyed the challenge so i did it for fun...here is my response,



-So careful of the type she seems,
so careless of the single life-
Tennyson, In Memoriam (1850)