Underground Writers Network Forum Need Help!!!

Please read the first few chapters of my book and reply. I am up to have it published and the more response that I can get online. The better it would look to the publisher. I thank each and everyone of you in advance.

Sheets

You have a comfortable writing style that invites the reader in. The chapter I read is an excellent example of the show, don't tell school of writing. The only weakness I see is that the story doesn't seem to be going anywhere. You have a very well drawn character, but until I see his story taking an interesting turn, he's just some guy in a grocery store. I don't have to read a novel for that, I can just drop by the Safeway.

I like the voice of the character. He comes across as a very real person.

Gary