The Unreviewed Forum Constructive Critisism Needed ..

I'm new to writerscafe, I'm 14 and I'm unsure of my abilities. All reviews good or bad are HUGELY appreciated! I need tips on how to improve and any compliments on good aspects of my writing. I love writing and I just want to improve and opinions and ideas are all very helpful! If you review I'll review you too! Thank You. :)