The Unreviewed Forum Is my story any good?

Well I was hoping someone might be able to review my book...Well duh I guess that's why were all here so can anyone? Check out the prologue of my book...pretty please? And if anyone likes it I will continue otherwise you know, what's the point? I also am working on a third story if any cares to read it and notice I said third not second. That's because I already written about 6 Microsoft Word pages if any cares to read that. Well that's all please someone check them out I would be eternally grateful. Thanks!

Hey, sorry. I'm the creator of the group- the primary one who is definitely supposed to review your stuff. Been really busy. School, fair, studying, etc. And there's so much to read! But I'll definitely look at and review your book, it's just that when there are so many members and me being kinda busy it's hard to take care of this group. So sorry, but I will review it! Thanks for asking, I hope other people in the group will review your story too. Thanks for joining my group! :)