The Sci Foundation Forum "You're Worth It" by Met By Su..

"...see, not look passed her. " - passed? or past? and more than once.
You shifted the voice of the work from I to she - you need to choose which it is to be from it's beginning and carry it through.
Overall, I think you really have something worth being told and heard.

Take care,
Chris

I've read so much of your poetry and always wondered what your stories would be like... Now I know... WOW! I am blown away by your flow of thought in such a concise pattern... It goes from being a teenager, through the turmoil of relationships, to the conclusion that "you are worth it." Not once does the reader have to stop and wonder... It just goes! Excellent write!

---- Jack