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I went ahead and posted Chapters 1 & 2 if anyone wished to backtrack after reading Ch. 3 or if you would like a Chinamen's chance of understanding any parts of Ch. 3 before reading it. Ha!

Attention CC: You have already read a good deal of Chapter 2 -- the excerpt "Candice"

Thanks everyone.

-norm

So, Norm, do you not want Chapters 1-2 reviewed and are just providing them for reference? Or do you want reviews on them as well? (Just clarifying so you get the feedback that would help you the most.)

-cc

Sure, I'd love for them to be reviewed.

I'll take whatever I can get.

(norm assumes the fetal position considering perceived tone to CC's query)

If you need a good whip, I think my cat-o-nine-tails is under the sink in the game room where the kids can't find it and hurt themselves.

-nErm

Sorry to sound cranky. Making sure people get the feedback they want is one of my pet peeves. Oh, and I'm in the middle of explaining every single bad debt I've had for the last 10 years for my bar application, which makes me crabby. I didn't mean to sound that way to you.

::biggrin::

-cc

[quote=C C Holtman Oh, and I'm in the middle of explaining every single bad debt I've had for the last 10 years for my bar application,

::biggrin::

-cc[/quote]

Why do they make you do that?

Sorry for hijacking your thread Norm.

Norm - hi! Nice to meet you.

I left a review of the prologue. If you want more, just holla.

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I didn't think you were cranky. Just joking with you. I'll write more next time so the sarcasm comes through clearly. =)

-norm

PS. Just tell them you had a psycho stalker roommate.

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I hope you know that the FBI's Carnivore computers are now watching you after typing the "H" word and hitting enter.

Ha!

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Thank you. Point made and understood. Whatever I post is first draft material and I like the feedback to it as I have very little (reads: virtually none) writing experience. To say that it reads "rough" and has "tense shifts" is about as nice as one could put it. =)

I can carry what you pointed out and edited through the rest of the piece. I type very fast when I write and try not to pause or think too much when doing so. "Mental vomit" sort of stuff.

Nice to meet you too. I haven't read anything of yours yet and I'm sure you have had plenty of reviews on some of it. Let me know if there is a particular piece you would like read.

-Norm

Hey Norm. I've put up comments on Chp 1. Will come back and do Chp 2. Mostly thoughts on flow and motive.

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"Dude...

I know.

Dude...

I KNOW."

Mow the yard or keep hitting refresh waiting for your Ch. 2 review.

Good show, Rob. I'm all about what you pointed out. It's mental vomit and first draft crap, a lot of it... I have a lot of the same thoughts after actually reading it a few times. Hard to step back and do that, ya know?

Having almost no experience writing and very little reading, I don't have the skill set or vocabulary to undertand or put into words the flaws I see in this piece so far.

Much -- Much -- appreicated.

-Norm