Sci Fi & Fantasy Writers at the Table Forum The first draft of my first bo..

Savior's the first novel I've written, as I'm sure you gathered, and posted on my profile is the first draft. I'm working on the second draft, and some feedback might help me move things along.

So, let me tell you a bit about the story:

In a modern world, much like ours, a war is constantly being fought right under the common man's nose; a war between the demons, and those who would seek to stop them. The demons want nothing more than to enslave and exterminate the human race, and begin the world anew. They certainly have the force to do so, the only thing that's stopping them is a prophecy which states that a Savior will be born who will end the conflict and exterminate the demon race.

After years of searching, it's believed that Matthew Whiler is that boy. Matt, a seemingly normal teenager, has his life turned upside down when he's suddenly haunted by dreams of the world's end. His life is shattered when his history teacher is killed and replaced by a demon who's sent to kill him. Aided by a mysterious man named Jack, Matt learns of prophecy, and his destiny to be the Savior. With his guardian jack, Matt must prepare for the end of the world and the Uprising of demons while he learns just what it means to be a hero.

I was hoping to get it to sound much better than that, but this is what I settled with. The chapters are broken into sub-stoiries, and while those main plots go on, the overall plot builds as well. Once you can get through the godawful writing of the first chapter, I hope the rest will speak for itself.