Novels & Short Stories Forum New girl in town

I'm writing a short story called 'The Moment'  its divided into parts, so far i've released 3 parts. Would love it if you could check it out. Its a story of a girl divided by a cultural clash, she returns to Sindh Pakistan after having lived in England too long to fill up a void of love. 

Part 1: 

Part 2: 

Part 3: 

Shall eagerly be waiting for feedback! :D 

I'm new here, only my second day. So i do hope to make new friends and read things as well :)