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Hello, I'm new to the cafe. So far it's been very enjoyable with a lot of talent. I have posted a project I've been working on in my free time. If anyone enjoys Sci-Fi, fantasy, I'd like to encourage you to take a look at Wing Commander Rising Day Storm. There are some errors as well as not being finished. I'm hoping to receive some feed back on the story. I have no writing experience and this is my first attempt at writing. Thanks.