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This is the first chapter of my short story.Rip it apart if needed.Thanks!

The warm glow of florescent lights snuggle my face.My body tries futily to let loose of this straitjacket made of sheets, and I hear the melody of nurses footsteps right out the door.

Another morning at the Kamogawa hospital is about to begin for me.

Every wakening starts with white clothes measuring my vitals and confirming my aliveness.Simultaneously a tray of gelatinous goop emerges from the recesses of the hospital.I am slowly fed my food through means of straw.

Continuing on and on with my daily regimen would be as mundane to as it was to my friends and family so I'll move on.

I usually spend my days blankley appreciating the grandiose room that was set up for me.To my left is state of the art equipment that keeps me alive juxtaposed by a bowl of pulpory.And a TV turned on just loud enough to be audible faces me.

My days didn't used to be like this though.I enjoyed sports and living life while still being able to write for myself.I can still remember the initial embrace of the metal.