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So I finally posted a third chapter to a story I've been writing! It would be amazing if some people could revise it and help me out! I'm working on character development and a narration voice, so if you decide to read the story, please be sure to give me feedback in those fields. You can find my writing on my profile, the story (A New Perspective) is the only form of writing I have at the moment. The newest chapter, the one I need to be revised, is Chapter 3, but it would be great if you could give me some input on my other chapters!