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A tap on the door,
A bang on the door,
A bellowing roar,
Open up, or else!!
Bang!!! the door falls off.
 
She could not see them,
they had hoods on them,
they had a foul smell,
the smell of destruction,
the foul foul smell of beasts.
 
Give us all your money!!
the sturdy figure bellowed,
she cowered and pointed,
a slim figure moved on,
came back with a bag.
 
She wimpered,
all she had saved now gone,
gone, gone, just like that,
from having to nothingness,
and in a flink of a minute.
 
Hold her down,
she had him bellow,
rough hands,
hard slap,
then
she felt it,
tearing her outside and inside,
she felt another one mount,
another one, another one.
 
she opened her eyes,
the nurse was there,
the reality was there,
she no longer had her pride,
she shed a tear,
a painful tear,
for what she had been saving,
saving hard for marriage had gone,
gone so painfully.

Hi, i'm deedee and new to this group and to writerscafe. I joined this group to get reviews so i'm making sure I give some out as well! This will be my first one. The men were hooded makes me feel like this took place in another era. LIke back in time. Whether that is true or not, sorry but I like the thought of this taking place during mid evil times for ex. Some of the language is a bit old english too, which also lends itself to this feeling like it took place in the past. I like the line at the end that shows us this was a woman who had values and pride. This was very traumatizing to her. glad I got to read it and looking fwd to reading more.