100 % Review Forum Review for a Review (Stories)

I'm looking for some honest opinions on my featured story, "Harmonicas." It's still in the first draft phase but, if anyone reviews it, then I would be glad to review one of your stories back. Just post the name as a reply to this. **Please note I will review a poem if you really want me to, but I don't really know what I'm talking about, and I don't have the free time for books/ long chapters.