100 % Review Forum Something new im working on

Here's a little piece of a poem I'm still working on. It might be a little abstract on odd. Just wanted to get some honest feedback.  Thanks folks.

  Twilight threads through vertical haze
  As if baptized in feathers of vapor
  Streamliner turns in slow degrees
  Waves like razors slice against its bow
  A feeling like this can swell
  A man's soul with content        (that's all so far)