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Hey guys, I'm fairly new here. At first I only posted a short story I had written called "Fireman, Lonely" and wanted to just leave it and perhaps tell some of my friends who enjoy reading to check it out. I feel like my writing is offensive to some people, I self published a book called "Superman Had a Handgun" and I know It had to offend someone. That said, I am what I am and I write what I write and if you would like to step into my world and check out "Fireman, Lonely" I'd surely appreciate it. I also love to read, so I will be reviewing your work as well. I could use a good editor, this much I already know, but if you want, feel free to get lost in my story and I do hope you enjoy yourself.

Hello Patrick Gray ,
First , the idea of your story are used many time , TV, Books . For me it's not wrong to use some old ideas in only one condition ,that you have to be sure ,you writes it with new  style and  not wrote before .
It easy to say it's good idea , because you try to rectify an social problem and give some solution , that if i'm not wrong ?

But like what i told you before , if you want to write this idea , the most importan is how can you write it with new style .

wish you the best
John Victor