ahh but what of cliche'...and the capitalizing the first word is of no intent, it merely happens, i dont clean that up until/when and if it goes to a publisher no worries man, again i ask you what of cliche? Would you have told Walt Whitman or any of the other greats- cliche'- words are words, its how you put them together to dance!
Thank you for your review. It was very helpful! I will go over the poem again and address these issues as soon as I rest up a bit. I love true constructive advice.