Cobra

Written sometime around March/April 2003. A sample from the book I am currently constructing

 

From a distance

Midnight eyes narrow

Heart sinks

Muscles freeze

As they slice right through me

And I am gone.

 

The net has fallen from my grasp

Now I’ve been poisoned by you

You say, “I don’t bite!”

But you sure as hell do

You smile

It’s comedy

Satisfied

As I dissappear

 

Author's Note

May need a little more work... have yet to revise this one.

Reviews

[lindsay]

I like this has it is. This is so well written.

"The net has fallen from my grasp

Now I've been poisoned by you"

Those were my favorite lines, I connect with those the most. Great write.

[~LeeAnn~]

I am sorry to announce that your poem (Cobra) did not make the finalist for the Broken Hearts contest.
LeeAnn

[Prose-full]

love it..leave it..it's so great...

[*~Poetic_Essence~*]

Wow i like the imagery in this piece it made it easy to follow along and it made me wanna read on til' the end..you kept me intrigued and that is always a plus..
"From a distance
Midnight eyes narrow
Heart sinks
Muscles freeze
As they slice right through me"