See for Me

A new nursery rhyme, inspired by my own severe vision loss, intended to resemble a traditional nursery rhyme.

See for Me

 

What color’s the sky, dear?

My poor eyes can’t see.

It’s blue as a bird’s egg,

Grandam, so it be.

 

What color’s the meadow?

My poor eyes can’t see.

It’s green as an em’rald,

Grandam, so it be.

 

What color’s the night, dear?

My poor eyes can’t see.

It’s black as a coal pit,

Grandam, so it be.

 

What color’s the flame burn?

My poor eyes can’t see.

Grandam, it’s as golden

As my love for thee.            

Author's Note

Initial reactions and constructive criticism welcome. This is meant to feel like a traditional nursery rhyme of the 18th century.

Reviews

[Diane]

This was a beautiful piece of work. Simple but very loving.

[Debbie Barry]

Thank you, Diane! I'm really pleased that you enjoyed it.

[Glen Weimann]

I think you've hit your target spot on! Nice work. As I read it, I could easily imagine some simple melody or rhythmic rendition. And the simple love and clarity of the situation come across with sensitivity. Well done.

[Debbie Barry]

Thank you, Nigel! I'm truly pleased that you enjoyed it. I deeply appreciate your supportive comments.

[sette]

this is one touching poem it talks about the love of a grandchild towards his/her grandma, kudos to the grandchildren who has this kind of love they are being raised right.

[Debbie Barry]

Thank you, Sette. I'm really pleased that you enjoyed it.

The real people who inspired this are my cousin's two young daughters, who often see things for me, since I lost the greater part of my vision. They do very well for 9 and 5.

[Coyote Poetry]

So beautiful and so wonderful poetry dear Debbie. This is poetry. Support to make you feel good. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry. I had to read again. You made me smile.
Coyote

[Debbie Barry]

Thank you, Coyote! I'm really pleased that you enjoyed it! I'm happy to know it made you smile, my friend. (((hugs)))

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Debbie. I enjoyed this one.

[Debbie Barry]

Thank you again.