Thoughts of Random Moments

Ode for Rain - Hurt - Resurrection - Pile Up.

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Ode for Rain

“Headlights of the cars glimmer the street,

And the raindrops look like million butterflies

Flickering their wings together; they rise and they die”

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Hurt

“And they laugh on your pain,

I wonder would they cry on your death”

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Resurrection

“Souvenir the sweet memories of those who are lost behind,

Move on with a brave heart; loving everyone who is left around”

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Pile Up

“There is a downpour of thoughts,

And my mind is being flooded by the words”

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Author's Note

Some fading thoughts in my diary :)

Reviews

[Randolf Ramos]

This is genius!
To be able to comprehend life, the subtle meaning of it! The wisdom to know the truth about life, things and everything. You could have been gifted with acute sense of comprehension not just words but the meaning of life itself!

I got to learn a lot of wisdom from you
Keep on writing please

[LouisianaBird]

Very deep and thoughtful.
You didn't have to go and fake thoughts on paper to get this one out.
Very nice.

[Joiedevivre]

Nice! I have so many of these I hope I can grow into poems but you have shown me some of them can stand stronger on their own.

[Siddhartha]

Oh, at first glance these thoughts seem disconnected but then closer up there is that stream of universe and it's vagaries running though them. You have captured the essence of our being perfectly.

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blimey...I just love Pile Up and Hurt...if so few words could convey so much..you have managed that..thought provoking and poignant..you created a gem

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[Ruth]

Flooded, cleasnsing, a detailed portrayal of hurt! Amazingly moving love!
The emotion works with water, stunning! xx

[TAO]

I'll second what Randolf Ramos has already said. Genius is the word for this piece.

[alesuriko]

Very interesting random thoughts that seem to string together by mourning and rain. I really enjoyed the cynical tone of Hurt and the imagery of thoughts becoming a downpour of rain in Pile Up. Very good writing for these four interconnected short poems. Well done.

[Young Mountain]

Brilliant
Brilliant
Brilliant